its fine

im finished --> [link]

you're a great author so i thought it was crazy not to watch you

yeah but that would be what happened before she met evan and stuff (all the long paraghraph i was talking)

well you could use lori and i am still working on a referance but shes nice and kind but kind of a bragger. she makes friends easily and is very fond of sports. her story is she is a wild pichu but her father was extermiated by a organization of evil pokemon out to rule the world.they had detected a powerful presence in the area and assumed it was her dad. after killing her dad. they thought nothing could stop them but several months later, they detected another powerful pressence and thought they had the wrong pikachu. so they kidnapped and killed her mom too. but when lori woke up the next morning. she found herself alone.being scared she ran around looking for her mom. i guess there you could say she ran into evan or something. but they found the strong pressance because somehow she had leared to use metromome even though it was impossible for a pichu to know that. her moveset is metromome, wish, thundershock and sweet kiss. that was kinda a fanfic i was working on but i basicly said she trained alone and evoled learning voltackle and trying to find out what happened to her mom and dad and why they had killed them. i think i said too much. you asked for a little tweeks and i gave you a plot. but that was a fanfic i was working on. its still not finished.

thanks

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